Modern medicine or witchcraft can damage us. Modern medicine can harm us because of the many pills that we take, but also in witchcraft there is damage because they think that them strange medication help us like lizard's blood, crocodile dung and pig's teeth. So, in my opinion, modern is better.
I don’t believe that witchcraft can help us become healthy. In recent years the world advanced and use the past, and so did the medicine. Therefore, Doctors now know much more than they knew before. I think that should people(wo.) use modern medicine because I know that people think that in the modern medicine people need to take pills, and its not healthy but the pill helps us feel Better and its prefer frome the witchcraft.
Please complete your essay.(30)
Daphna
Tuesday, May 26, 2009
Sunday, May 10, 2009
Anne Frank
Anna Frank was a young normal girl until World War 2 began. Before the war Anna Frank was like all the girls. On her birthday she got a diary, and she called it Kitti. In the diary Anna wrote everything she felt.
I think Otto Frank, Anne's father, should have published Anne's diary because it's important that people know what happend to people who didn't survive in the war and can not tell us what happened to them like Anna Frank. And also who ever reads the dairy can see what happened before the war and what happened after the war and see how ordinary lives like Anna's life ,suddenly changed.
I think that Otto Frank published his daughter's, Anna's, diary because he also thought that it was important to show the difficulties they had during the war, that was a terrible war, difficult for everyone. In Anna frank's dairy we can see it from a different place. Anna was a child and she spoke like a child, cynicism did not exist.
This is better. Well done. (85)
Daphna
I think Otto Frank, Anne's father, should have published Anne's diary because it's important that people know what happend to people who didn't survive in the war and can not tell us what happened to them like Anna Frank. And also who ever reads the dairy can see what happened before the war and what happened after the war and see how ordinary lives like Anna's life ,suddenly changed.
I think that Otto Frank published his daughter's, Anna's, diary because he also thought that it was important to show the difficulties they had during the war, that was a terrible war, difficult for everyone. In Anna frank's dairy we can see it from a different place. Anna was a child and she spoke like a child, cynicism did not exist.
This is better. Well done. (85)
Daphna
The Case Against Homework
Children don’t like to study after school hours and like all the children, so doesBen Berrafato. Ben is an 11 year old boy from N.Y, who believes children can do without homework.
Homework is designed to help children understand much better the substance that is taught in class. The teachers teach them deferent(sp.) subjects, later she give them homework, and at home the student do their homework and see what they don’t understand. when the teacher checks the homework the student can ask the teacher questions that they don't understand.
Homework is necessary to learn, but if a lot teachers give a lot of homework, the students can't succeed in their studies because they can't focus and try to understand all the question therefore, they don’t benefit on homework.
In my opinion it will be very difficult for students to learn things without homework, because the lesson is very short and the child is not capable to learn a lot in no time and because of that homework is necessary.
(60)
Daphna
Homework is designed to help children understand much better the substance that is taught in class. The teachers teach them deferent(sp.) subjects, later she give them homework, and at home the student do their homework and see what they don’t understand. when the teacher checks the homework the student can ask the teacher questions that they don't understand.
Homework is necessary to learn, but if a lot teachers give a lot of homework, the students can't succeed in their studies because they can't focus and try to understand all the question therefore, they don’t benefit on homework.
In my opinion it will be very difficult for students to learn things without homework, because the lesson is very short and the child is not capable to learn a lot in no time and because of that homework is necessary.
(60)
Daphna
The Fun They Had
The story "the fun they had" talked about two different ways of learning.
In the story have boy and girl that coming from the futur Found a book about a school from the past, and there they Discover a Different way of learning .
Through the learning of two children in the story is learn in a way we are not used to, in this way all The child sits in front of his computer at home when the computer is the teacher, the computer teach him. I think that this way of learning is very different and less good(phr.) from our way.
The way of learning that we have today is very different from the way of learning of the children in the story. Today all children go to one large structure called a school, in the story they learn at home, alone. Our teacher is a person who understands us and our feeling and in the story he does a robot that does not understand the children's feelings. We students will learn many of the same age together(phr.), unlike the future all children will learn one's own(phr.).
Learning has both ways of learning(phr.) have advantages and disadvantage.
There are several advantages in the future school: the teacher teaches in private, school is at home, so the students don’t need to leave the house to go to school.
There are also a number of shortcomings in the school of the future.
In schools today children learn a lot together in the future there is not something they learn at home alone and because of this they are not familiar with various friends from various locations.(phr.)
I think the best way to learn is in school today, in a big building with lots of friends, and teachers who can understand us. I would not want to learn all the time alone, with a robot that explains things to me.
אני לא הבנתי מזה -(phr.)
(65)
Daphna
In the story have boy and girl that coming from the futur Found a book about a school from the past, and there they Discover a Different way of learning .
Through the learning of two children in the story is learn in a way we are not used to, in this way all The child sits in front of his computer at home when the computer is the teacher, the computer teach him. I think that this way of learning is very different and less good(phr.) from our way.
The way of learning that we have today is very different from the way of learning of the children in the story. Today all children go to one large structure called a school, in the story they learn at home, alone. Our teacher is a person who understands us and our feeling and in the story he does a robot that does not understand the children's feelings. We students will learn many of the same age together(phr.), unlike the future all children will learn one's own(phr.).
Learning has both ways of learning(phr.) have advantages and disadvantage.
There are several advantages in the future school: the teacher teaches in private, school is at home, so the students don’t need to leave the house to go to school.
There are also a number of shortcomings in the school of the future.
In schools today children learn a lot together in the future there is not something they learn at home alone and because of this they are not familiar with various friends from various locations.(phr.)
I think the best way to learn is in school today, in a big building with lots of friends, and teachers who can understand us. I would not want to learn all the time alone, with a robot that explains things to me.
אני לא הבנתי מזה -(phr.)
(65)
Daphna
Wednesday, March 11, 2009
extra curricular activities
Our school, like all the schools in Israel, usually arranges extra curricular activities for the pupils. The activities vary from going to the theatre, to the movies, to visiting museums and enjoying field trips. In my opinion, some of the activities are beneficial while others are just a waste of time. - good opening!
About a month ago, my school took us to an interesting activity about drugs. The activity exposed us to the process of making the drugs, the side effects of using drugs and the way people become addicted to drugs. I learned a lot from that activity, because it was interesting, enjoyable and it expended my knowledge on the matter.
On another occasion, my school wanted to teach us about alcohol. The school invited many people to give us a lecture about consuming alcohol. However, the lecture became too long and all the pupils got really bored. I think that this subject is so important, and I feel it’s a shame that we didn’t benefit from that lecture.
As I mentioned before, my school arranges a lot of extra curricular activities, which are not all so great. I think that my school can contribute a lot to our general knowledge, and that’s why it has to make sure that the activities it arranges are both interesting and knowledge expending.
This is great work, but I'm afraid you can't take credit for it. As I said before in class, I need to see your own work, not those of others. The gap between what I've seen you write in class and in exams and what you have written here, is too big. I'm sorry, but I can't grade this essay. Getting a little help here and there is O.K. but this is too much.
Daphna.
About a month ago, my school took us to an interesting activity about drugs. The activity exposed us to the process of making the drugs, the side effects of using drugs and the way people become addicted to drugs. I learned a lot from that activity, because it was interesting, enjoyable and it expended my knowledge on the matter.
On another occasion, my school wanted to teach us about alcohol. The school invited many people to give us a lecture about consuming alcohol. However, the lecture became too long and all the pupils got really bored. I think that this subject is so important, and I feel it’s a shame that we didn’t benefit from that lecture.
As I mentioned before, my school arranges a lot of extra curricular activities, which are not all so great. I think that my school can contribute a lot to our general knowledge, and that’s why it has to make sure that the activities it arranges are both interesting and knowledge expending.
This is great work, but I'm afraid you can't take credit for it. As I said before in class, I need to see your own work, not those of others. The gap between what I've seen you write in class and in exams and what you have written here, is too big. I'm sorry, but I can't grade this essay. Getting a little help here and there is O.K. but this is too much.
Daphna.
Sunday, February 22, 2009
our school and all (the) school(s) in israel usually have extra curricular activites, like going to the theatre, watching movies and visiting the museun. some of the activites (are) interesting and educated and some of em(them) (where is the verb here? - are) very boring.- Ok that's a start. But you haven't finished your opening yet, and your whole essay. Do you realize that it was due 3 days ago? Please finish your work. Daphna.
Sunday, February 1, 2009
too much of a good thing
Parents usually help their children whenever they get into trouble. Children often do things they shouldn't and get involved into weird situations. Parents hurry to help their children because they want to protect them and make them feel safe and secure.
In my opinion parents shouldn’t help their children too much, but rather to let them deal with their problems on their own. Parents who want to avoid(ww. - prevent) their children from having to deal with their problem don’t really help them. In fact, those parents spoil their children and get them used to the fact that they don’t need to work hard. Spoiled children can't tell right from wrong and can't manage real life without their parents.
This is very good Stav, but it's not organized as an essay with a conclusion at the end. Please try and reorganize your writing and add an ending to your essay.(85)
Daphna.
In my opinion parents shouldn’t help their children too much, but rather to let them deal with their problems on their own. Parents who want to avoid(ww. - prevent) their children from having to deal with their problem don’t really help them. In fact, those parents spoil their children and get them used to the fact that they don’t need to work hard. Spoiled children can't tell right from wrong and can't manage real life without their parents.
This is very good Stav, but it's not organized as an essay with a conclusion at the end. Please try and reorganize your writing and add an ending to your essay.(85)
Daphna.
Wednesday, January 14, 2009
the blanket
Petey is a young boy who lives with his father, his father's girlfriend and his grandfather. Petey loves his grandfather very much and enjoys spending time with him.
The grandfather is an old man who loves and respects his family, and sadly understands that his son doesn’t want him to stay at home. The grandfather is very modest and doesn’t need much.
I think that the end of the story is very emotional. I love what the boy did and the way he wanted to respect his grandfather. The little boy also made his father understand how bably(sp.) he behaved and how he hurt grandpa. The little boy could teach his father a lesson or two. - This is correct, but your haven't mentioned how Petey achieves that. How does Petey make his father understand? What are his actions and what is their impact?
Daphna.
The grandfather is an old man who loves and respects his family, and sadly understands that his son doesn’t want him to stay at home. The grandfather is very modest and doesn’t need much.
I think that the end of the story is very emotional. I love what the boy did and the way he wanted to respect his grandfather. The little boy also made his father understand how bably(sp.) he behaved and how he hurt grandpa. The little boy could teach his father a lesson or two. - This is correct, but your haven't mentioned how Petey achieves that. How does Petey make his father understand? What are his actions and what is their impact?
Daphna.
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